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Instructions: Respond to the asterisked items first. If you have time, respond to the rest in numerical order. Do not confer with the writer when answering the questions.
*1. What were your reactions when first reading this draft? List some of them here.
Great paper, but you were not objective enough
2. Does the essay have a purpose beyond fulfilling the requirements of the assignment?
YES* NO What do you see as that purpose?
*3. Who would be interested in the profile provided in this essay?
People who are afraid to speak in public
4. To what audience is the essay directed, and is this the appropriate audience for the subject?
Shy people
5. List two examples that show how this essay appeals to the needs of this audience. Refer to specific tone, word choice, details included, format, and so forth.
a. you tell how the class has helped you
b. you are very enthusiastic about the class
*6. What is the essay’s main point or thesis? Write the thesis sentence down here.
Speech class is not at all what you think. It is a preview or a preparation, for you when you go and get a job
Is the thesis specific enough? YES* NO If not, make suggestions for narrowing the focus.
*7. Reread each paragraph, noting whether it is related to the thesis of the essay.
Par. 1 YES* NO Par. 5 YES* NO
Par. 2 YES* NO Par. 6 YES* NO
Par. 3 YES* NO Par. 7 YES* NO
Par. 4 YES* NO Par. 8 YES* NO
*8. Has the writer sufficiently covered of the topic, discussing the who, what, where, when, how, and why of the profile? Comment:
Yes, but I would like if you were more objective about the movie.
*9. Comment on the relevance and effectiveness of the information conveyed below.
a. Are the essay’s facts interesting? YES* NO SOMEWHAT
Please note any facts you found uninteresting or off the subject:
b. Does the essay make clear why all the information is significant?
YES* NO UNSURE If not, explain here:
c. Is the information understandable to you? YES* NO Comment:
d. Is the language clear, with technical terms defined? YES* NO
List terms that need to be defined here:
10. In which paragraphs would you like to see more information (facts and examples)?
Par. 1 2 3 4 5 6 7 8 Why?
*11. Comment on the handling of the sources of the profile.
a. What person or persons were interviewed?
Yourself and maybe some members of your class
b. Explain what makes the person interviewed an appropriate source of information.
You took the class
c. What other sources of information are used? (List them.)
nohting
d. Are quotations, facts, and paraphrases attributed and documented clearly and correctly?
yes
12. Does the introduction
a. Get readers’ attention? YES* NO
b. Present the thesis? YES* NO
c. Introduce readers to the essay’s perspective? YES* NO
d. Comments:
13. Does the conclusion
a. Remind you of what has been said? YES* NO
b Provide something new to think about? YES NO
c. Round the essay off smoothly? YES* NO
d. Comments:
Instructions: Respond to the asterisked items first. If you have time, respond to the rest in numerical order. Do not confer with the writer when answering the questions.
*1. What were your reactions when first reading this draft? List some of them here.
That her speech class is very interesting and helpful
2. Does the essay have a purpose beyond fulfilling the requirements of the assignment?
YES* NO What do you see as that purpose? That speech is important for all to learn and how good the class is
*3. Who would be interested in the profile provided in this essay? student
4. To what audience is the essay directed, and is this the appropriate audience for the subject?
student
5. List two examples that show how this essay appeals to the needs of this audience. Refer to specific tone, word choice, details included, format, and so forth.
a.
b.
*6. What is the essay’s main point or thesis? Write the thesis sentence down here.
That speech is a helpful class
Is the thesis specific enough? YES* NO If not, make suggestions for narrowing the focus.
*7. Reread each paragraph, noting whether it is related to the thesis of the essay.
Par. 1 YES* NO Par. 5 YES* NO
Par. 2 YES* NO Par. 6 YES* NO
Par. 3 YES* NO Par. 7 YES* NO
Par. 4 YES* NO Par. 8 YES* NO
*8. Has the writer sufficiently covered of the topic, discussing the who, what, where, when, how, and why of the profile? Comment:
yes
*9. Comment on the relevance and effectiveness of the information conveyed below.
a. Are the essay’s facts interesting? YES* NO SOMEWHAT
Please note any facts you found uninteresting or off the subject:
b. Does the essay make clear why all the information is significant?
YES* NO UNSURE If not, explain here:
c. Is the information understandable to you? YES* NO Comment:
d. Is the language clear, with technical terms defined? YES* NO
List terms that need to be defined here:
10. In which paragraphs would you like to see more information (facts and examples)?
Par. 1 2 3 4 5 6 7 8 Why?
*11. Comment on the handling of the sources of the profile.
a. What person or persons were interviewed?
none
b. Explain what makes the person interviewed an appropriate source of information.
First hand experience
c. What other sources of information are used? (List them.)
none
d. Are quotations, facts, and paraphrases attributed and documented clearly and correctly?
yes
12. Does the introduction
a. Get readers’ attention? YES* NO
b. Present the thesis? YES* NO
c. Introduce readers to the essay’s perspective? YES* NO
d. Comments:
13. Does the conclusion
a. Remind you of what has been said? YES* NO
b Provide something new to think about? YES* NO
c. Round the essay off smoothly? YES* NO
d. Comments:
May 1, 2008 at 3:59 pm
Written Peer Response
Essay writer’s name_Rexhina Ziti__________ Peer’s name__Dayna Teague Flynn______
Instructions: Respond to the asterisked items first. If you have time, respond to the rest in numerical order. Do not confer with the writer when answering the questions.
*1. What were your reactions when first reading this draft? List some of them here.
Great paper, but you were not objective enough
2. Does the essay have a purpose beyond fulfilling the requirements of the assignment?
YES* NO What do you see as that purpose?
*3. Who would be interested in the profile provided in this essay?
People who are afraid to speak in public
4. To what audience is the essay directed, and is this the appropriate audience for the subject?
Shy people
5. List two examples that show how this essay appeals to the needs of this audience. Refer to specific tone, word choice, details included, format, and so forth.
a. you tell how the class has helped you
b. you are very enthusiastic about the class
*6. What is the essay’s main point or thesis? Write the thesis sentence down here.
Speech class is not at all what you think. It is a preview or a preparation, for you when you go and get a job
Is the thesis specific enough? YES* NO If not, make suggestions for narrowing the focus.
*7. Reread each paragraph, noting whether it is related to the thesis of the essay.
Par. 1 YES* NO Par. 5 YES* NO
Par. 2 YES* NO Par. 6 YES* NO
Par. 3 YES* NO Par. 7 YES* NO
Par. 4 YES* NO Par. 8 YES* NO
*8. Has the writer sufficiently covered of the topic, discussing the who, what, where, when, how, and why of the profile? Comment:
Yes, but I would like if you were more objective about the movie.
*9. Comment on the relevance and effectiveness of the information conveyed below.
a. Are the essay’s facts interesting? YES* NO SOMEWHAT
Please note any facts you found uninteresting or off the subject:
b. Does the essay make clear why all the information is significant?
YES* NO UNSURE If not, explain here:
c. Is the information understandable to you? YES* NO Comment:
d. Is the language clear, with technical terms defined? YES* NO
List terms that need to be defined here:
10. In which paragraphs would you like to see more information (facts and examples)?
Par. 1 2 3 4 5 6 7 8 Why?
*11. Comment on the handling of the sources of the profile.
a. What person or persons were interviewed?
Yourself and maybe some members of your class
b. Explain what makes the person interviewed an appropriate source of information.
You took the class
c. What other sources of information are used? (List them.)
nohting
d. Are quotations, facts, and paraphrases attributed and documented clearly and correctly?
yes
12. Does the introduction
a. Get readers’ attention? YES* NO
b. Present the thesis? YES* NO
c. Introduce readers to the essay’s perspective? YES* NO
d. Comments:
13. Does the conclusion
a. Remind you of what has been said? YES* NO
b Provide something new to think about? YES NO
c. Round the essay off smoothly? YES* NO
d. Comments:
May 1, 2008 at 8:50 pm
Written Peer Response
Essay writer’s name______Rexhina____________ Peer’s name_Jordan______________________
Instructions: Respond to the asterisked items first. If you have time, respond to the rest in numerical order. Do not confer with the writer when answering the questions.
*1. What were your reactions when first reading this draft? List some of them here.
That her speech class is very interesting and helpful
2. Does the essay have a purpose beyond fulfilling the requirements of the assignment?
YES* NO What do you see as that purpose? That speech is important for all to learn and how good the class is
*3. Who would be interested in the profile provided in this essay? student
4. To what audience is the essay directed, and is this the appropriate audience for the subject?
student
5. List two examples that show how this essay appeals to the needs of this audience. Refer to specific tone, word choice, details included, format, and so forth.
a.
b.
*6. What is the essay’s main point or thesis? Write the thesis sentence down here.
That speech is a helpful class
Is the thesis specific enough? YES* NO If not, make suggestions for narrowing the focus.
*7. Reread each paragraph, noting whether it is related to the thesis of the essay.
Par. 1 YES* NO Par. 5 YES* NO
Par. 2 YES* NO Par. 6 YES* NO
Par. 3 YES* NO Par. 7 YES* NO
Par. 4 YES* NO Par. 8 YES* NO
*8. Has the writer sufficiently covered of the topic, discussing the who, what, where, when, how, and why of the profile? Comment:
yes
*9. Comment on the relevance and effectiveness of the information conveyed below.
a. Are the essay’s facts interesting? YES* NO SOMEWHAT
Please note any facts you found uninteresting or off the subject:
b. Does the essay make clear why all the information is significant?
YES* NO UNSURE If not, explain here:
c. Is the information understandable to you? YES* NO Comment:
d. Is the language clear, with technical terms defined? YES* NO
List terms that need to be defined here:
10. In which paragraphs would you like to see more information (facts and examples)?
Par. 1 2 3 4 5 6 7 8 Why?
*11. Comment on the handling of the sources of the profile.
a. What person or persons were interviewed?
none
b. Explain what makes the person interviewed an appropriate source of information.
First hand experience
c. What other sources of information are used? (List them.)
none
d. Are quotations, facts, and paraphrases attributed and documented clearly and correctly?
yes
12. Does the introduction
a. Get readers’ attention? YES* NO
b. Present the thesis? YES* NO
c. Introduce readers to the essay’s perspective? YES* NO
d. Comments:
13. Does the conclusion
a. Remind you of what has been said? YES* NO
b Provide something new to think about? YES* NO
c. Round the essay off smoothly? YES* NO
d. Comments: